What I Miss- Dorian
I miss my dad
My life is bad
He lives far away
I really want to see him today
We had some good times
When we ate some limes
When we went swimming in the ocean
I forgot to put on some lotion
My legs were so red they looked like tomatoes
When my legs usually lokked like potatoes
When we went home
I got an ice cream cone
When the day turned to night
I turned off my light
The next day i moved to New York
Where people called me a dork
California is the place I want to be
So that my friends and I can climb our same old tree
I also wish I could leave
So that I can see my same ol’ leaves.
May 18th, 2007 at 12:17 pm
That’s a very good and sad poem, nice job! pete
May 18th, 2007 at 12:57 pm
Dorian, I understand what it’s like to move to a new place and be far away from loved ones. I, too, had to leave my family when I moved to New York, now they are hundreds of miles away and I often feel sad. However, I know that I have many people here in New York that love me, as YOU do too! It’s just a difficult adjustment and takes some getting used to! You really put a lot of true feeling into this poem. I like that your are able to express your emotions through poetry! That’s one of the great things about poetry! Keep up the great writing!
May 18th, 2007 at 8:53 pm
wow that was really nice and sad!!
Does your dad really live far away from you?
May 19th, 2007 at 8:46 pm
Nice poem!(y)(i)
That’s sad do you really live far away from yor dad?:’(
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May 21st, 2007 at 11:36 am
Wow Dorian! That Was an amazing poem. I know how it feels to be out of place and stuck somewhere where everyone is different. Rock on with your poetic self!
*~*ALLEGRA*~*=)
May 21st, 2007 at 11:38 am
Dorian-
Amazing poem! I know what it feels like to be away from family. It seems that you would do anything to go back and see your dad in California.
Maya
May 22nd, 2007 at 11:38 am
Hey, That is a very emotional poem
~~Liz~~
May 28th, 2007 at 8:33 pm
Impressive poem Dorian! Again, I’m proud of you!
May 30th, 2007 at 10:03 am
Nice Poem you got there
It’s so sad
May 31st, 2007 at 9:25 pm
Dorian really emotional i feel bad for you. I guess you really miss him. Maybe you can see him soon
-Cami ya
June 4th, 2007 at 8:40 pm
Dorian,
I am very impressed with your honest approach in writing your poem. A true poet not only captures the moments in words but also lives the experiences. Excellent job!
Mrs. Strippoli
June 11th, 2007 at 8:55 am
I too miss my dad, but he is ever close to my heart and I’m sure your dad is too, Dorian. I appreciated your poem.
June 13th, 2007 at 9:43 am
Nice poem I really liked it!
It made me cry
June 13th, 2007 at 9:45 am
I really liked the poem!
It made me cry!:(
Your favorite teacher ms Rivera..:)
June 13th, 2007 at 7:23 pm
Nice poem
Do you like the spanish class?
September 29th, 2007 at 6:56 pm
Excellent Post. My compliments to the author.
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